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Admiral_Needa
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 Posted: 07/25/05 2:12 pm ::: Former Storm G Jamie Redd to Juvenile Detention |
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It's been a few years, but it doesn't matter. Inmates, co-workers, even folks at the grocery store hear the name "Redd" and instantly recognize her name.
"But it never stops," she said. "It's kind of funny because since I've been in the correctional industry, the inmates are like, 'Yeah, you played hoops.' Really, I try to keep a low profile, and it hasn't worked out so well."
Redd, 27, has worked at her current position for 10 months and wants to make a transition to juvenile detention. Yesterday, she was back at KeyArena as speaker for the Business and Professional Women/USA Girl Power Day.
Redd let her audience know how the law led to opportunities for her in basketball.
http://seattletimes.nwsource.com/html/seattlestorm/2002398860_stormglance24.html |
Imagine what it will be like when Shaq O'Neal becomes a sheriff... 
I believe she used to live in the SF Bay Area too...
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| Posted: 07/26/05 1:13 am ::: Re: Former Storm G Jamie Redd to Juvenile Detention |
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Hmmm.... 
OK, I'll bite. 
Q: Who is Officer Redd?
A: Former Storm G Jamie Redd 
"still turns heads"? Why is she turning heads? Not descriptive.
"to Juvenile Detention"? JD is for people under 18. Any former W player is going to be older than that.
"Former Storm G Jamie Redd to Juvenile Detention"
= Former Storm G Jamie Redd is transitioning to juvenile detention.
"Former Storm G Jamie Redd is Transitioning to Juvenile Detention"
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You answered my 1st question: Reporter's title wasn't descriptive enough for you
Please answer this: Why do you find it necessary to change the title of an article whether negative or positive when it breaks the rules of journalism?
Ask any reporter & they will tell you 3 principles of journalism. The title of a story tells the reader what the basic story is about. The 1st paragraph briefly encompasses the entire story. Each paragraph after that just fills in more detail. 1 sentence towards the end, mentions juvenile detention, as her possible future, while everything above is about her still being recognized for her former basketball skills. The 2 paragraphs below it are about basketball, Title IX, and college scholarship.
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Your title, above, only points out 1 detail, in 1 sentence, of the story.
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| Redd, 27, has worked at her current position for 10 months and wants to make a transition to juvenile detention. |
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Officer Redd has not transitioned -- She wants to transition.
Therefore the original title *Officer Redd still turns heads* is appropriate in principle due to the article being about her current recognition as a former basketball player. The fact she was at *Key Arena* as a speaker, in the context of the rest of the article, *infers* her speaking about basketball, Title IX, and scholarship.
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I think it's truly great that Jamie Redd, who has recevied the benefits of Title IX, is giving back to the community of professional women and girls, through her speaking and working with law enforcement .
This was quite lenghthy and all that I will say on this forum. I'll read answers, but won't respond again.
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